The “But’s” died!!!


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They showed me a dream

A beautiful house by the brook

The sound of rushing water

Like an audible caress

Waking me up in the morning

They showed me the lush gardens

Green mazes stretching before my eyes

They showed me sprawling country sides

And then they showed me the tittle deed

It had my name on it

And I said “but…”

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They showed me a young lady

Beautiful to look at

Happy

Fulfilled

Loving and loved

I saw her

She woke with a smile on her face

Walked with a spring in her step

And had a song on her lips

They showed me her picture

It looked like me

And I said “but…”

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They showed me this high-flying lady

Gucci this, Fendi that

Private jet

CEO of a Fortune 500 company

I saw her life

Saw how she used fame and fortune

To create an avalanche of change

Children were fed

Infant mortality reduced

Women and men empowered anew

I even felt her contentment

It felt like mine!

Then I said “but…”

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This morning I officiated at a burial

It was a mass burial

“But” died

“But I’m not good enough”

“But I am not pretty enough”

“But such things don’t happen to me”

“But it has never happened in my family or my nation”

“But how?”

“But why?”

All the “Buts” died

And today, I gave myself wings

So I can fly

Fly…

Into the tomorrow I see!

Post-script

I tried a new  format with my poem, by putting pictures to depict the theme of each paragraph. Let me know what you think. Did it work for you or not? And why? I got the photos from:

1. Home-www.wakpaper.com

2. The beautiful lady- http://www.clutchmagonline.com

3. The private jet- http://www.trendzona.com

and 

4. the Lady Priest- http://www.thetelegraph.co.uk

17 replies to “The “But’s” died!!!

  1. Beautiful! I felt the intensity of every word! I buried my buts too! Your poem was like it’s requiem high mass! Thanks! God bless you

  2. This is a wonderful composition. The pictures made the peom have life. I agree with you that we need to kill the ‘buts’ in our lives to be able to live our dreams. Cheers

    1. I am so glad you liked the pictures! I thought so too but it’s not something I see in poetry, so I wanted to sample opinions! Yes, yes! Let’s kill all the ‘but’s’, according to Thomas Edison “if we did all the things we are capable of doing, we will literally astound ourselves”.

  3. Beautiful piece Haj, the pictures gave life to the words.

    It’s so simple and instructive. I’ll ensure i abide by the message.

    The pix worked very well for me, though I’ll prefer them coming after their respective poems, instead of before.

    1. Thank you so much for the feedback Muna, will use that styling for my next poem and see. Sounds good!

      Please abide by the message! You Muna are so intelligent, so driven… and no excuse should stop you, if one person can thrive in this country, you can!

  4. Haj, I love the truthfulness, simplicity and clarity of the poem. It spoke to me. Thank. The pictures really work to underscore the message and to create a visual interest.

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